Wednesday, February 16, 2011

Front Porch Sketch



The air hung heavy, hot, and still; his sleeveless undershirt stuck to his chest.   Dampness settled into the well-worn carpet, coaxing out the smell of stray cats that always seemed to show up and make themselves at home in his house.  He picked up a glass, filled it with water and ice, and spooned Nestea into it, clinking ice cubes as he stirred.  He liked this new kind of iced tea mix with the lemon flavoring and sweetener in it.  It seemed to quench his thirst more so than the Faygo Red Pop he’d gotten twelve for a dollar at the Kroger store where he worked.

He picked up his glass, his portable radio, and a bottle of Mercurochrome and stepped out onto the front porch.  Outside the house, at least, it felt a few degrees cooler.  Inside the house were sounds of games shows on the TV and of one of his four kids plunking out a piano lesson.  Though he’d escaped the smell of cat, outside he was met by the smoky, pungent odor of mosquito spray spilling out from town trucks patrolling the neighborhood.  He watched as the neighborhood kids followed a truck down his street, riding their bikes through its cloud of fumes.  Crazy kids.  They shouldn’t be breathing that stuff, he thought.  But he guessed they weren’t hurting anybody.  Besides, it was summer, and they needed to have their fun.

He plugged in his radio and began fiddling with the antennas and dial, trying to tune in the sound of Bob Prince’s voice.  Through the static, he heard that the Pirates were at bat—two on, two out.  The count on the batter was one and one.  He hoped the static in the air and on his radio meant a storm in the area might just crack the stifling heat.  He settled himself onto the porch swing, its metal chains creaking and groaning rhythmically as he rocked back and forth.  He shook the bottle of Mercurochrome and began applying red liquid to the cuts on his hands.  He’d gotten himself good that day, boning out cuts of meat he never could afford to buy for his own family.

The radio crackled.  Swing and a miss.  The porch swing groaned.   The air sank.  Ice cubes disappeared.  He stared out into the evening, too hot and too tired to think.  And then Bob Prince’s voice broke through the static, You can kiss that one goodbye!  Willie had dinged one over the fence.

 And for a brief, fleeting moment on a hot summer night, there was joy.  And hope.  And peace.

16 comments:

Unknown said...

Nancy this is great. Those moments. So important. So beautiful.

Jennifer @ JenniferDukesLee.com said...

Vivid writing here. What a blessing to read. Brought back memories of summer thunderstorms as a kid. Something about that static/crackle in the radio.

Jodi said...

You got me again, girl. Move over, Garrison Keillor. Loved it. BTW, I used to run behing those mosquito trucks. When I told my kids about it, they were horrified :) I think they half expected me to glow in the dark or something...

Southern Gal said...

I was one of those kids riding my bicycle behind the mosquito truck. I always begged for Mecurochrome instead of Methiolate for my cuts because we all know how Methiolate burns. You took me there.

Brian Miller said...

you paint a vivid picture of days gone by...

Anonymous said...

Girl! I will always be your biggest fan! You are my Rock Star Writer.

Sue said...

I am not anonymous. I have unveiled. It's Providence.

Leslie said...

This was GREAT. Makes me want to read more...

(My husband used to run behind the mosquito trucks, too.)

amy said...

love love love... but what's new? i always do, especially here.

Anonymous said...

How achingly beautiful and how real...Thank you Nancy. - Ethel

Shaunie @ Up the Sunbeam said...

What a vivid snapshot Nancy! Feels like a Norman Rockwell painting in words. And the joy of one hit over the fence--not too many things sweeter!

Mommy Emily said...

you know, you can really write. you really can. this is gorgeous, nancy. xo

Unknown said...

Nancy.
This was so wonderful. Every perfect word.

L.L. Barkat said...

I was telling someone today that most of my joy comes in fleeting moments. Maybe I'm not alone? :)

Michelle DeRusha said...

This is really good writing, Nancy. Such great detail -- you really paint the scene in words. You're a great storyteller, too! Nicely done.

Cheryl Smith said...

What a fun read. How long has it been since I've heard, much less seen, the word Mercurochrome? I wonder if my children even know what it is? :)

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